The Chase

She was sure that she was being followed. The guy had followed her, all the way from the shop, it was making her frantic with fear. All she could hear was her own heart, pounding in sheer fright. Her brain had shut off, she was practically racing now, he was far off but he was still chasing. All she wanted now, was to reach home safely.

She eventually reached near her house. That’s when she finally calmed enough to understand the words of the man following her,

” Madam, your shoe, it slipped off, a couple of blocks back”
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Each week,Β Rochelle Wisoff-Fields-Addicted to PurpleΒ hosts Friday Fictioneers where we’re challenged to write a piece of flash fiction in 100 words, more or less, based on the picture above.

This week’s photo is from http://ceayr.com

 

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27 thoughts on “The Chase

  1. I enjoyed the twist ending, but I was confused by the chronology. First, she knows she’s being followed all the way from the shop. But then in the end, she first hears him when she’s already home. I’d work on that a bit, but otherwise, a fun piece.

    1. Thanks.:)
      I tried to make it all a bit scattered, in order to show her really confused state of mind.
      Her nervous state creating a tunnel vision and only when she reached the safety of her home, she actually can pay attention to anything else.
      I didn’t realize it would make the narrative confusing. I’ll work on it for sure. πŸ™‚

    2. According to your suggestion I made some changes to the end.
      Instead of hearing him for the first time, she finally understands his words for the first time when she nears her home. Small change but it mends the chronology, I think.
      I hope this rectifies the confusion.
      I appreciate the feedback. πŸ™‚
      Thank you.!!

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